Unseen Friend
It's time for another rap, feels like years since the last one, but the new one is called "Unseen Friend". Read it and tell me what you think!
Smelling the breaze of the sapphire sky
Smiling my joy to the setting sun
This moment I cherish as a high
But not all have been like this one
Sometimes I was chained by the lows and grief
Never thought I could turn another leaf
Exhausted I was with no hope to breathe
But the answers lay close beneath
Though I can't see you
I know you're always there
Saved me from darkness, from the jaws of despair
You're someone I can trust
Someone I can turn to
Compassionate and Just
Giver of Peace, beyond the end
You're my Unseen Friend
Smelling the breaze of the sapphire sky
Smiling my joy to the setting sun
This moment I cherish as a high
But not all have been like this one
Sometimes I was chained by the lows and grief
Never thought I could turn another leaf
Exhausted I was with no hope to breathe
But the answers lay close beneath
Though I can't see you
I know you're always there
Saved me from darkness, from the jaws of despair
You're someone I can trust
Someone I can turn to
Compassionate and Just
Giver of Peace, beyond the end
You're my Unseen Friend
6 comments
Ya'qub Tue, 3 Mar 2009 - 15:03
Re: Unseen Friend
NOt bad, not bad at all. But it isn't finished! It needs at least 2 verses, yet you've only written one. And even that verse isn't long enough - it's only 8 bars and it should be 16. Every rapper writes 16 bar raps, Muslims shouldn't be any different! 😃
Fateha 6 Fri, 6 Mar 2009 - 16:15
Re: Unseen Friend
WOW!:)
The Lamp Wed, 11 Mar 2009 - 10:41
Re: Unseen Friend
Yeah thanks guys.
Yaqub, mate the reason why I've made this short is because the others that I've written are longer, so a little variety doesn't hurt.
TPOS Sun, 14 Nov 2010 - 17:28
Re: Unseen Friend
Love 😃
LookingToSee Sun, 14 Nov 2010 - 17:54
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+1000000!! i love it!!
TPOS Sun, 14 Nov 2010 - 17:56
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I wish it was longer though.
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